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piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-09-2008, 04:19 PM
I
Love
You
By Jessica
(piratesofthecaribbeanjess)
Characters
Zipporah-main character
Autmn- Best friend of Zipporah
Maria- Zipporah's Mom
Leon-Zipporah best friend
Gabriella-Zipporah's Best friend
Jacob-Zipporah's Dad
Sammera- Zipporah's Older Sister
huskerrich
10-09-2008, 04:27 PM
nice character list, and title.
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-09-2008, 04:31 PM
Chapter 1
Dear Diary,
Sometimes i wonder what it would be like have someone to love you, say I love you, hold you, comfort you. I want that so much, but i don't have that. My family is torn apart my parents are divorced. My older sister is away in college. My mom is working two job's just to keep clothes on my back, food on the table, and a roof over my head. I have the best friends that care about me and say they love me , but it never seems like they really care. Autumn, Leon, and Gabriella are great friends you will ever have. Ive known them from kindergarten till now. We swore we would be together till the very end. Leon and I known each other longer. I can trust him with anything I tell him. I'm turning sixteen in 2 months I need someone to love me for me!
Love,
Zipporah
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-09-2008, 04:31 PM
oh thank u
huskerrich
10-09-2008, 04:37 PM
Nice opening Jess, I hope you have fun with the story:)
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-09-2008, 04:42 PM
thanks im writing ch.2 rite now i hope u like it
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-09-2008, 04:53 PM
Chapter 2
Zipporah woke to silent house as always. Her mom had already left for her first job. Zipporah walked down the hallway to the bathroom and took a shower. She got dressed for school and headed off. Today was not her day at all. Popular kids making fun of her and her friends, bugging teachers, and one nagging mom. When she got home there was a message on the answering machine. Zipporah pressed the botton to listen to the message, it was a message from her dad.
"Hey zipporah how r u?, i was calling to tell you and your mother the date of the wedding-" before the message could finish zipporah cut it off. "will he ever give up and stop calling us" Zipporah said.
She went up stairs and opened her diary
Dear diary,
WHY DOES MY DAD EVEN TRY? he tries to get back in our lives and tries to make everything better, it's like he wants to make everything go away . Well he can't! he left my mom, my sister, and I high and dry. SO he thinks he can make us come to his happy celebration of his new family, I Don't think so!
Love,
Zipporah
destinysmiles!
10-09-2008, 11:30 PM
wow what a "dad" more!
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-12-2008, 01:30 PM
yea im writing more
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-12-2008, 01:49 PM
Chapter 3
At school the next morning, Zipporah saw her best friends standing at her locker, waiting for her. Autmn, Gabriella, and Leon didn't look like themselves. They looked like somebody died. As she approached them she noticed leon was starring at her.
When she arrived at her locker she looked back at them with worry in her eyes.
"Hey guys whats wrong?"
Leon looked up and replied
"I'm moving to England"
"WHAT! Why?!"
"My dad got a great job in England and he wants me to come with him"
"You can't go!"
"Zipporah i have to it's only me and my dad, i have no relatives that live close by and i can't live alone"
"but-"
"I can't stop this from happening, sorry, as much i don't wanna go i have to"
The bell rang. Autmn, Gabriella, and Leon gathered there things to go , Zipporah stood forzen. Shocked, angry, and sad.
Autmn, Gabriella, and Leon left for their class leaving Zipporah in the hallway alone.
Zipporah walked down the hallway to the parking lot and walked back home.
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-12-2008, 02:25 PM
Chapter 4
Zipporah's head was spinning with memories of Leon and Her. Leon was a brother to her nothing could change that. When Zipporah arrived at her house, she saw a car on the curb, it looked familar to her. She opened the door, but the door was already open. The house lights were on. Zipporah thought to herself "Maybe Sammara is home from college, but she usually calls". When she walked into the living room she saw a figure on the couch.
"Whoever is in here u better show your face now or else ill call the police" Zipporah shouted
A soft voice answered "Hey honey"
"DAD! What the heck are you doing in our house!"
"You never replied to my messages or calls, I thought something happened to you, It was time for a visit. Can't I see my own daughter"
"No! I'm not letting you walk in here and act like everything is fine between us."
"Zipporah, look i know your still angry at me, but it's the past now"
"The Past reflects the future"
"Zipporah i want your mom, your sister, and you to be at this wedding"
"I'm not coming to see my own father marry that creepy thing that calls herself beauitful, does she own a mirror"
"I will not have you talking about her like that, and your coming and thats final"
"You don't own me"
"But i am your father"
"But you left us"
"Well When your mother gets home we will have this talk, aren't you supposed to be in school?"
"arent you supposed to be in Arizona with that witch of women you call your fiance?!
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-15-2008, 07:50 PM
Chapter 5
When mom arrived from work, She was surprised as me, but a little more furious than I was.
"Zipporah who's car is that outside, there better be no boy in this house"
"Hey Maria"
"Jacob?!" she said in a questionable tone
"Yea it's me"
"WHAT THE HELL ARE YOU DOING IN MY HOUSE!"
"Maria let me ex-"
"explain What! explain that you moved to arizona to be with that witch of a person that you call your fiance. Explain how you left Zipporah, Sammera, I high and dry with no money to support us. Please explain, I'm dying to know Why!"
"Look i came here to see if everything is going well and to ask you to come to my wedding"
"Ha! your Joking right? You came here to ask us something besides that, and nosotros somos bien!, so no need for the concern whats really wrong Jacob?"
"I want Zipporah to come live with me in Arizona"
"WHAT! You think you can come up in here and ask me if i can loan you my Baby, H-tothe-no!"
"Come on think about it Maria"
"NEVER!"
"Zipporah?"
Zipporah looked in his eyes and said "You left mom, sammera, and me alone to fend for ourselves and you think you can come up in here a year later and ask me to come with you, I'm sorry dad, but no!"
Jacob walked over to the door and Opened the door and said "Think about it please"
destinysmiles!
10-15-2008, 09:43 PM
more, it`s really good just that you just changed her name I thought it was Zipporah and that you misspelled it, but you have been writting Zapporah in most of the chapters which confuses me
anyways if you want to say and we are good/okay you should have written "nosotros estamos bien" in spanish there is a verb to be for place and another verb to be of person, of being, it`s hard to explain but i htink you got it
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-16-2008, 07:10 AM
yea...we are is nosotros somos? and i keep getting confused with zipporah and zapporah lol sorry i didn't mean 2
huskerrich
10-16-2008, 09:02 AM
hi Jess, nice job, more please.
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-16-2008, 04:24 PM
thank u, im writing more now
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-16-2008, 05:12 PM
Chapter 6
After an hour of siting on here bed and staring at the wall refelcting, Zipporah pulled out her diary to let out all her misery that she had been bundling up inside her.
Dear Diary,
Why me! i mean there are other people out there, but He had to pick me. Why me! i lost my dad a year ago and he's come back to steal me away from my mom. I lost my best friend in a day. Why me...
***
The next day at school Zipporah walked to her locker, not finding her friends waiting for her there. Down the hall she saw Leon taking out his things. Zipporah walked to his locker.
"Hey" she said looking down
"Hey" he said continuing taking out his things
"I guess this is it"
"Yea, Where were you the yesterday of the day?"
"I went home"
"Why?"
"Alot was on my mind"
"Alot has been on your mind lately , Because you've been missing class lately"
"Yea, Why do you care so much"
"Because your my best friend, Zipporah i care so much about you. You just don't know"
"Thats what my dad said to me before he left us"
Tears started streaming down her cheeks
"Thats what he said those exact words!"
"I'm so Sorry, Zipporah i didn't mean to say that"
"I know you didn't"
Leon wrapped his arms around her and hugged her.
The bell rang.
"Do you want me to walk you home?"
"Yea" she wipped her tears away from her face
Leon took her hand, they both walked down the hallway hand in hand.
When they arrived at her house, she unlocked the door. They walked in and sat down on the couch.
"Zipporah, Whats wrong?"
"Yesterday when i left school, my dad was in my house. He came to check on us and told me and my mom that he wants Sammera and me to live with him, and to also come to his wedding."
"What! he can't do that and Sammera is in College!"
"I guess he wants her to move her things from my mom's house and into his house,so when she comes down she'll stay with him."
"Well he can't do that he needs permission from your mom, and I'm guessing it was a N.O!"
"Yea she went crazy"
Leon laughed
"I'm kinda tired"
"Me too"
Zippporah leaned aganist leon. He laid back. Zipporah closed her eyes.
*****
Zipporah opened her eyes. She looked at Leon, he was fast asleep. The door started to unlock. She looked at the clock, it was only 1:00 P.M. mom wasn't supposed to be home till 6 P.M. Sammera opened the door and slammed it behind her. Leon jumped up.
"Calm down it's only me"
"What are you doing here Sammera?! aren't you supposed to be in California"
"SI!, but guess who transfered me to the university of ariozona!"
"DAD! how could he?"
" And, You know what else!"
"What else?!"
"He's transferring you to Arizona High School and taking us away from mom legally!"
"WHAT!!!"
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-16-2008, 05:48 PM
Chapter 7
Leon Jumped to his feet.
"He can't do that, he's just trying to get you guys back. Win you guys over"
"Leon, let me tell you something..." Sammera said calmly
"Yea sure" he said
"HE ALREADY DID! HE IS TAKING LEGAL ACTION! MEANING HE IS TAKING MY MOM TO COURT! THERE IS NO WAY OUT! UNLESS MY MOM GETS ENOUGH MONEY TO GET A LAWYER AND I HIGHLY DOUBT THAT!"
Leon backed up and sat back on the couch and mumbled "sorry.."
"I'm not leaving even if he takes us to court"
"You have no choice if he wins! they'll take mom to jail if you don't go!"
Sammera started pacing.
*****
When my mom came home and when we told her she didn't take the news very well..
"QUE!"
Tears started coming down her face
"QUE! h-h-he"
"Yes mom"
"NO ONE IS TAKING MY BABIES, NO ONE DO YOU HEAR ME!"
Tears kept streaming down her face, she fell to the ground.
I got on my knees and sat next to her comfronting her.
"I love you mom"
"I love you too"
Sammera kneeled next us and hugged mom.
"I love you mom"
"I love you too"
"I guess i better get a lawyer and call Jacob and figure out the court date"
she stood up and took the phone in her hands and left us on the ground.
Sammera and Zipporah started crying continously.
Leon knelt next to them and hugged them.
****
Zipporah walked Leon to his house. He lived 6 blocks from her house.
when they arrived at his house.
Zipporah and Leon started hugged each other goodbye.
"You promise you will call when you get in england and when you can."
"Of Course"
She hugged him again
he whispered in her ear "I love you"
she looked at him "I love you too"
huskerrich
10-16-2008, 05:59 PM
more please
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-16-2008, 06:00 PM
ok
MileyandAshleyfan4ever
10-16-2008, 06:02 PM
I loved this, more!
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-16-2008, 06:12 PM
thank u, ill write more
MileyandAshleyfan4ever
10-16-2008, 06:52 PM
Yaaaaaay!
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-16-2008, 08:00 PM
Chapter 8
Mom made the court date with dad. We flew to Arizona the day before and stayed in a hotel. The day of the trial we were the first one's there.
"Mom, Aren't we a little early?" Zipporah asked
"Yea"
"Here comes dad and his wicked witch" Sammera said
We all looked in the direction they were coming. They approached us with frowns on there faces.
"You guys are early" Jacob said
"Si" Sammera answered
"Hello Maria how are you?" the witch asked
"How do I look?"
"like you need make up"
"Excuse me! i know you are not talking do you own a mirror! i guess not!"
"Ladies please" Jacob said
"Don't tell me to do anything, Mr.take everything away from everyone!"
Maria walked past them and screamed "Zipporah and Sammera Get over here!"
"Coming" they said in unison
Zipporah and Sammera walked past there dad and tried to catch up with there mom.
******
When we got into court, the judge called my mom to the stand to plead her case.
"Ms. Lopez can you please tell us why you are here today"
"Im here today to win whats rightfully mine, My two girls. A year ago, he left us high and dry for that thing , thats hanging on to him like the leech she is, so please give me my babies back"
Jacob raised his hand "Your honor?"
"You may speak Mr. Johnson"
"I am those girls fathers, they belong to me to"
"Ok"
"May i have Zipporah Johnson to the stand please"
Zipporah stood up and walked to the stand. As Maria stepped down from the stand, Zipporah stepped up.
"Zipporah can you tell me why you don't wanna live with your dad?"
"My dad left my mom, Sammera, and I all alone to fend for ourselves, he's already enrolled me in a school where I might not be going and took my sister out of acting in school in california and enrolled her in university of Arizona. He never visits us and doesn't love us!"
"Thank you Ms.Johnson"
Zipporah stepped down from the stand and walked back to where they were standing.
"May i call Sammera Johnson to the stand"
Sammera walked to the stand and sat down
"Please answer the same question your sister answered"
"Ok, Like Zipporah said he took me out of my 3rd year in college to go to this university that doesn't have acting classes! it's so unfair"
"Thank you may leave the stand"
Sammera got up and stood next to Zipporah
"I have heard Mr.Johnson's side of the story already so I have made up my mind" the Judge said
"Zipporah and Sammera your going to live with your dad. you will see your mom every two weeks"
Maria started to cry continously, Zipporah and Sammera looked over at her dad and saw the smile and pity on his face. They both glared at him with sadness in their eyes.
Zipporah and Sammera helped there mom to car.
When they arrived at the hotel, they started to pack their bags and got ready to go to the airport.
*****
When they got home from the airport, Zipporah went to her room and started packing her things. She was up till 11 p.m. When she woke up, she heard her mom crying and Sammera comfronting her. Zipporah got ready for school and started walking to school. When she got to school she saw Autumn and Gabriella at her locker.
"Hey Zipporah whats wrong?" Gabriella asked
Zipporah started throwing her belongings in her Backpack
Gabriella and Autumn looked at her with confusion.
"I'm moving to freaking Arizona with my dad"
"WHY!?" Autumn asked
"We lost the trial" Zipporah said
"When are you leaving?!?!" Gabriella asked
"In 2 days"
Gabriella and Autmn hugged her
*****
Zipporah was all packed , she had said Goodbye to her mom a zillion times and said goodbye to Autumn and Gabriella.
"Are you guys ready" Jacob said
"I was never ready" Sammera said
Sammera hugged and kissed both of her mom's cheeks "Bye mom"
"Bye Baby"
Zipporah Hugged and kissed both of her mom's cheeks
"By mom"
"By honey"
Zipporah and Sammera walked to the Limo. They got in the Limo. The limo started for the airport. When they got there they unpacked there belongings and headed inside the airport.
******
"Here we are girls" Jacob said
"hooray lets throw a party" Sammera said scarcasticly
"Whoohoo.." Zipporah said
"You'll love it here" Jacob
******
~PART II Is Coming~
huskerrich
10-16-2008, 11:07 PM
more please
MileyandAshleyfan4ever
10-17-2008, 12:56 PM
more!
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-20-2008, 07:27 PM
~Part II~
Characters
Zipporah-Main Character
Sammera- Zipporah's Sis
Leah- Zipporah's and Sammera's soon to be Step-mom
Jacob-Zipporah's and Sammera's Dad
Maria- Zipporah's and Sammera's Mom
Leon- Zipporah's Best friend
New Characters
Marisa
Jaime
Zack
Melissa
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-20-2008, 08:01 PM
Chapter 1
The limo driver was waiting for them outside of the airport. He opened the door for Zipporah, Sammera, and their dad. They got in the limo and drove to their new home. When they arrived there Leah (a.k.a the wicked witch of north, south, east, and west) was waiting for them outside of the house. Jacob stepped out the limo when it came to a stop, Leah came running to him and gave him a long kiss.
Sammera and Zipporag said "ewww!!" in unison
"I think my lunch is making it's way back up" Zipporah said
"same here" Sammera said
"How much longer in hell"
"I don't know, but when you find out please tell me"
"gladly"
"We better go and unpack our things out the trunk"
Sammera said
"ok"
Zipporah opened the door and they both stepped out. Leah unwrapped her arms from around Jacob and ran to greet Zipporah and Sammera.
"Oh MY GOSH, I'm so happy to see you guys again, the last time i saw you we had a interesting discussion, but thats the past now"
"Im so glad to see you to!, and im so surprised you look so different, because the last time I saw you , I swear i thought you were a little bit prettier, but i guess i was seeing things." Sammera said with a grin
Leah stood there frozen with anger in her expression. On the other hand Zipporah and the limo driver were cracking up from behind.
"No Comment" Leah said
"In other words no clever come back registered yet"
Zipporah and the limo driver kept laughing.
Jacob walked over to them "I'm glad you guys are having fun already."
"We are have a grand time, aren't we leah?" Sammera smirked at leah.
"Yea just grand" Lean said
"We should take our things out the trunk* Zipporah said
"No worries, Stephen will take them to your room for you"
"Um....who's Stephen?"
"The butler"
"Um...we got this dad"
"Not acceptable, your a princess act like it, what was your mom teaching you guys"
"Not much" Leah mumbled
Sammera glared at leah
"More than you ever did" Zipporah snapped back
Zipporah walked away and gathered her belongings and headed for the door, Sammera was 2 steps behind her."
"Can you show us our rooms?"Zipporah said
"upstairs the second floor" Jacob replied
"K"
"Take the stairs the elevator is getting repaired"
"ok.."
they walked into the house, as they walked in their mouths dropped.
huskerrich
10-22-2008, 11:24 PM
more please jess.
piratesofthecaribbeanjess
10-23-2008, 09:01 PM
ok i will
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