Zanessa Fanfiction

[SmileyMiley11]

Chapter 1:
Vanessa had woken up when she heard her cell phone ring. She awnsered it its was zac, Hello? Hey V what are you doing later? Uh... nothing I guess why? Oh because I thought me and you could go to the Carnival this afternoon at three pm? Yeah sure that sounds like fun! Vanessa smiled to herself. Ok well bye i gotta go zac said Bye! they hung up. Vanessa was so excited. Ok now what do I wear Vanessa said to herself. She went into her closet. Hmm... a skirt nah to dressy, sweats... no to un-dressy, finally she settled on some Jeans and a purple Tee. After that she went downstairs and went outside into her car and was on her way to Zacs house.


Any Good?
(THIS IS MY FIRST FANFIC)
Post comments if you wanna read chapter 2!

[XxarlimeXx12]

i wanna read more

[mileysfan01]

more more plzzz!!!

[SmileyMiley11]

Ok 1 more comment and I'll write chapter 2!

[Miley is Smiley]

More!

[SmileyMiley11]

Chaper 2:
Vanessa Started her car and was on her way to Zac's house when she decided to call Miley Cyrus. Miley Awnsered, Hey Nessa Whats Up? Oh not much just going to to Zacs House you?? I have to babysit Noah today. Oh well guess what? What? I'm having a sleepover next week and I was wondering if you wanted to go? Yeah of course! Ok can you invite Ashley for me? Sure. Ok Bye gotta go! Vanessa Hung up and pulled into Zacs drive-way. She got out of her car and walked up to the door and knocked on the door. In a few moments Zac appeared. Hey V he said kissing her on the cheek, Hey Zac so are you ready to go yet? Yeah let me just get my sun glasses. Ok I'll wait here. Zac came back and they went outside and got into his car and drove off.

3 Comments until Chapter 3!

[XxarlimeXx12]

more its great

[Baby Vanessa]

more plz elizabeth pretty pretty please

[SmileyMiley11]

1 More comment! And thanks guys! ;)

[Baby Vanessa]

soemeone comment plz

[MileyWorld__Girl_05]

Nice!

[SmileyMiley11]

Chapter 3:
Zac and Vanessa were now at the carnival. So what ride do you wanna go on first V? Um.... i don't know you can pick. How about th Ferris wheel? Yeah that sounds like fun! Ok come on. Zac grabs vanessa's hand and they get on the Ferris wheel. Oh Zac this is so Romantic Vanessa says as she looks down at the tiny people below her. Zac smiles and says yeah Vanessa I love you. Me 2 Zac she says as they kiss. And then they reach the bottom and they get off the ferris wheel, and they head towards one of the food courts.


3 Comments.

[Baby Vanessa]

more plz i mean come on you can't leave there you should post his on fanfiction btw

[SmileyMiley11]

2 more comments!

[Vanessa*rox*my*sox*]

please please please pleaseeeeeeeeeeeeeee continue

[SmileyMiley11]

Oh what the heck! I'll continue! :P

Chaperter 4:
At the food court Zac Asks Vanessa what she feels like eating. Um i don't know I think I'll get a hot dog what about you? Uh.... Zac says as he looks at the menu I thik I'm gonna get a burger. Vanessa smiles ok lets go pay. They walk down to the cashier and order their food. Vanessa starts to take out her wallet when Zac says No V its ok my treat! Vanessa smiles and says ok :P Thanks Zac. No prob. Zac reply and they wait to get their food. After a few minutes they get their food and they go sit in a table. So hows your burger? Vanessa asks Zac. Its good. How your hot dog its good 2. So after this what ride do you want to go on? Zac asks vanessa. I'm not sure I wanna go on I ride I might throw up you know. And i really don't wanna throw up on your nice shirt. Zac laughs Ha Your probably right! After they finish eating they go and throw their trash away and head towards the game stands.

At least 2 more comments!

[Miley is Smiley]

More!Ur good!

[SmileyMiley11]

Thanks! But I need 1 more comment!

[XxarlimeXx12]

love it soo much, more more and more

[SmileyMiley11]

Chapter 5:
At the game stand Zac and Vanessa look around everywhere. So V wanna play a play? Sure but which one? How about that one Zac points to a game where you have to knock over the glass bottles.Ok V says. Zac hands the dude there a 5 dollar bill which is good for three shots. Ok Now watch and Learn vanessa! zac Says as her throws the ball and misses! Vanessa laughs! Was I supposed to learn something??? Haha Vanessa Zac says as he aims again and misses. After a few more shots Zac finally makes it and wins a huge teddy bear for vanessa! Aww! Thanks so much! V says as he kisses him on the cheek

[Mileysabsolutnumber1fan]

morez lizard! :P

[SmileyMiley11]

HEY! Thats Mean Kasserz! Ok but I need one more comment

[XxarlimeXx12]

aww so cute, more its great

[SmileyMiley11]

ok But I have to update it later because I don't have that much time right now.

[SmileyMiley11]

Chapter 6:
Your Welcome Zac says. So How about we leave now? Yeah I'm sort of tired. Ok Come on they both walk downs to Zac's Car and they get in and drive to Zacs Apartment. So V wanna hang out here? Vanessa smiles and says sure. When they get inside Zac goes into the kitchen and pours them some lemonade. Vanessa sips her lemonade when zac drops his all over his shirt. Oh Crap! I gotta go change my shirt! Zac runs out long enough for Vanessa to log onto her MSN and IM Ashley and Miley:


BabyV1065: Hey Ash, Miley!
Smilez467: Hey V!
Ash*Tizz: Hey V whats up?
Babyv 1065: nm I'm hanging out at Zacs house
Smilez467: oooooh hanging out with the boyfriend!
BabyV1065: What????
Ash*Tizz: don't listen to her! So what are you doing with Zac? Making out???
BabyV1065: NO! Well at least not yet! :P
Smilez467: Well have fun V! :P
BabyV1065: Whatever! Hey guys i gotta go Zac's coming back bye!
BabyV1065 Has logged off.

[SmileyMiley11]

Is anyone reading it? :(

[m&jrule]

great job (:
more!

[SmileyMiley11]

Yay at least someones reading it! One more comment and I'll continue!

[adolphin]

plz write more it is soooooooo good

[SmileyMiley11]

Ok I'll update later. I'm kinda busy at the moment!

[SmileyMiley11]

Chapter 7:
Zac came back and settled on the couch next to Vanessa. So what were you doing while I was gone? Uh.. Nothing! Nothing? Yeah nothing just waiting for you. Oh waiting for me? yeah.... so now what? Um... I don't know how about this? Zac kisses Vanessa. Vanessa smiles and says ok. They kiss for a few minutes until v's cell phone rings. Rinnnnnng! Oh vanessa says as she awnsers and the phone and hangs up shortly after. Zac I have to go! Oh ok well bye he says as he opens the door for her. Bye! Vanessa says as she runs out.

[XxarlimeXx12]

more your doing great

[SmileyMiley11]

Thanks! One more comment...

[danadog75]

MORE MORE MORE!!!!

love you smileymiley11!!!!!!
were ZAC buddies!

[destinysmiles!]

gee your fanfic is great!!

[SmileyMiley11]

Thanks Guys!

Chapter 8:
Vanessa was at home where her mom was waiting for her. hey Mom whats up? Oh there you are Van I need you to baby-sit tonight. Baby-sit Stella? Yeah me and your father are going out tonight do u mind? um no but can i invite someone over? Who is it? Someone..... Vanessa's mom gives her a weird look. ok I guess. WEll Were leaving now. Ok bye! Once V's parents are out the door vanessa quickly calls Ashley. Hello? Ashley awnsers. Hey Ash its me V hey wanna come over? Sure so can I bring Miley? were kinda hanging out at my house. Sure Bring her 2. Ok well I'll be over in half an hour. Ok bye V hangs up and Calls Stella. Stella comes over. what? Hey Ash and Miley are coming over ok. Ok Is Noah coming 2?? Yeah I think so. Ok see ya stella says as she goes up the stairs. Ok perfect! Vanessa thinks as she runs into the kitchen to get some food out.

[Baby Vanessa]

more more more please

[SmileyMiley11]

one more comment!

[sweet_smile]

mmoorree!!

[atisdale01]

more...zanessa rules

[SmileyMiley11]

Ok here it comes :P
Chapter 8:
Vanessa pulls out some chips,sodas,and candy bars. Just then the doorbell rings and Vanessa runs to awnser it and greets Miley and Noah. Hey Miley! Hey Vanessa! Oh hi Noah Stella is up in her room ok. Oh ok Noah says as she runs up the stairs to Stella's room. So wheres Ashley Miley asked. Um I don't know lets go into the living room I have food. Oh yum food! Vanessa and Miley both laugh. Just then Ashley walks in hey girls yes I've finally arrived Ashley said dramatically. Hey Ash Miley and vanessa both say at the same time. So now we can officialy start the GNO except we won't be going anywhere! Miley said. MIley your so weird Ash said. Ok guys lets watch some movies and eat jumk food and then we'll play.... truth or dare!

2 comments.

[SmileyMiley11]

any comments?

[xo_hannah_fan1_xo]

This is great! I just have some constructive critism for ya: When you're typing your chapters, make sure spelling and grammar is accurate. It makes it easier to read. Add quotation marks aswell. I got a little confused reading your chapters. Try doing this to your chapters:

Chapter 8

Vanessa pulls out some chips,sodas,and candy bars. Just then the doorbell rings and Vanessa runs to awnser it and greets Miley and Noah.

"Hey Miley! Hey Vanessa! Oh hi, Noah! Stella is up in her room ok?"

"Oh ok," Noah says as she runs up the stairs to Stella's room.

"So wheres Ashley?" Miley asked.

"Um I don't know. Let's go into the living room...I have food!"

"Oh yum! Food!"

Vanessa and Miley both laugh. Just then Ashley walks in.

"Hey girls! Yes, I've finally arrived! Ashley said dramatically.

"Hey Ash!" Miley and vanessa both say at the same time.

"So now we can officialy start the GNO except we won't be going anywhere!" Miley said.

"Miley, you're so weird! Ash said.

"Ok guys lets watch some movies and eat jumk food and then we'll play.... truth or dare!" Vanessa said with a devious smile spreading on her face.
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Make your chapters like that! It makes them look longer and are 100% more easy to read! Good luck with future chapters!

-xo_hannah_fan1_xo

[SmileyMiley11]

ok thanks I'll uh.. keep that in mind. So um.. I'll update later when I get more comments

[Gabriella Read]

more more...love it..

[SmileyMiley11]

Ok I'll update soon