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cutie_girl
01-08-2007, 03:51 PM
here's my first fan fiction! Tell me what i do wrong or what you like! This is delicated to cutie137 for her b-day! Happy B-day Cass! Thx for comments!

Chapter 1: A Little Dream
Setting: School

Miley: "Hey I heard that Jake Ryan is coming to our school!"
Lilly: "Yeah! I heard that he's a celebrity!"
Oliver: "Hey remember I am still a guy here!"
Lilly: "Shut up Oliver!"
Oliver: "No you shut up!"
Miley: "He's here~"
Lilly: "OMG! He's so cute!"
Jake: "Hi guys! I am Jake Ryan!"
Oliver: "Jake Ryan is SO joking."
Miley: "No he's not! He's my dream boyfriend! *daydreams*"
Girl #1: "So... do you have a girlfriend?"
Jake: "No I have a crush that is in this school. She's all smart, and funny... she's so down to earth!" *daydreams about his pen pal*
Girl #2: "Who is it?"
Jake: "She is my pen pal, Miley Stewart."

Chapter 2: Pen Pal Miley
Setting: School

Miley freaks out: "What? the pen pal i had for years is... JAKE?"
Lilly: "Oh that's new."
Oliver: "Oh yeah. who knew that Jake likes Miley or even knows her?"
Jake: "Miley, I really liked you since we started writing to each other. <3"
Miley: "I dreamed bout this. Never knew that it would come true, or knew that Jake is my pen pal! Jake, why did you lie to me?"
Jake: "I know! My signature's always Ryan. It was because I didn't want you to write to me like I am Jake Ryan the celebrity. I wanted you to write to me like I am Jake Ryan the person."
Miley: "Well you still lied! *slaps him and stomps away*"
Oliver: "Whoa that was fast!"
Lilly: "Oh yeah. FAST!"
Jake: "No Miley wait up!"
Miley walks into the washroom and cries: "Who knew that my trusted pen pal could lie to me?"
Then Miley heard mean footsteps from outside to the washroom. They were footsteps of Amber and Ashley.

Chapter 3: When They Attack
Setting: School

Miley: "Amber? Ashley?"
Amber: "I heard that Jake Ryan likes you!"
Ashley: "Yeah! Like, we're into Jake Ryan so we..."
Miley: "I noe wat u guys mean. Wanna beat me up eh?"
Amber: "No! We just wanna keep you from Jake."
Miley goes outta the washroom: "Well, c u guys later!"
Ashley: "Smile for the camara!" *takes picture of Miley scared*
Miley: "Oliver, Lilly, you totally dunno wat just happened."
Lilly: "You got beat up by Amber and Ashley?"
Oliver: "If she did, she wouldn't be alive right now."
Lilly laughs: "Yeah rite."
Oliver: "Actually, I am kinda jealous of Jake Ryan."
Miley: "Yeah?"
Lilly: "Seems like it!"
Oliver: "The bell's ringing. Let's go to class!"
Then Miley felt a tap on her shoulder. It was Jake... again.

Chapter 4: Letters, Letters, Letters
Setting: Miley's House

Miley opens her boxes of letters from Jake Ryan. She started reading some of them.

Dear Miley,
Hello! I am Ryan. It was nice to know that there's a girl out there that likes Zombie High. I like that a lot too~
In your letter, you said that you like the popstar Hannah Montana. Same with me. She really is hot and everything, but I bet that you are hotter <3
I like to watch TV and play on the computer. I was ALWAYS bugged by my friends because they always flip through the letter you sent to me last month. I hope you have a good New Year!
Your pen pal,
Ryan

Dear Miley,
Wow! I never knew that you loved to dance! Hannah Montana dances soooo well that I couldn't keep up with the dance moves. Could you?
Sleeping is one of my hobbies. I know that you enjoy sleeping too! Do you? Tell me in your next letter. And I hope that we'll be able to share deep secrets soon!
Your pen pal,
Ryan

Dear Miley,
I have a big confession to make. Even though we haven't met face to face, or talked face to face, I have a strange feeling about you. When I told my friends this feeling, they say that I must love you. Do I?
Let's jump to another topic. Well last night, my older brother fell right off his bunk! It was hilarious when he started laughing later with a bruised neck!
Your pen pal,
Ryan

Lilly: "Aw... that last letter was so sweet! You're so lucky that Jake's into you!"
Miley: "You know what? I am gonna throw those out! Jake is a LIAR!" *throws out every single letter in every box*
Lilly: "Ouch! You know that Jake must really like you!"
Miley: "Well you think so? How about you go and date Jake!"
Lilly: "I would wanna, but I know you really like Jake inside! Aw..."
Miley: "Whatever you say!"
Lilly: "Then how about you go talk to him?"
Miley: "No way! I am NOT going to talk to that big liar!"
Lilly: "Whatever you wanna do, Miley."
Robby Ray: "You girls are gonna sleepover?"
Miley: "Are you staying?"

Setting: School Next Day
Jake: "Miley, you know that I really like you."
Miley: "Well, Jake, you're a LIAR!"
The bell is ringing and they all go to class. Jake is following Miley.

Chapter 5: Broken Dreams
Setting: School

Miley turns around: "What?"
Jake: "I just wanna know where room 137 is."
Miley *mad*: "End of the hallway. BYE!"
Jake thinks: "Whoa! Geez Miley! I know that it's my fault, but you don't have to be that mad! I guess liking Miley isn't such a good idea... but I do still like the old her. The Pen Pal her."
Miley meets up with Lilly: "I really can't wait 'til the weekend! It's in 45 minutes!!!"
Lilly: "Oh yeah!"
Oliver: "At least we could get away from Mr. Celebrity!"
Miley smiles: "You guys ROCK!"

Setting: The Stewarts' House
Miley walks into her home: "Daddy? Jackson?"
No one answered.
Miley is scared: "Hello?"
No one answered.
Miley walks into her room and sees a dark shadow in the corner.
Miley screams: "Who, who, who are you?"

Chapter 6: Keely and Zoey Brooks
Setting: The Stewarts' House

Keely, Zoey and Robbie Ray yell: "Surprise!"
Miley: "OMG! My fave cousins are here! Daddy, I thought that you were kidnapped or something! Wait... Dadnapped!"
They all laugh.
Miley: "So Keely, Zoey, when did you guys get here?"
Zoey: "Today!"
Keely: "Yup! Today! It was painful flying from Toronto to here!"
Robby Ray: "Well glad that you're here girls! I was shocked when I saw them at the door."
They all laugh again.
Miley: "Yay! Group hug!"
All three girls hug.
Miley: "How's PCA?"
Zoey: "VERY good. Remember that Chase I told you about?"
Miley: "Ya, that guy that has a crush on you?"
Keely: "Ooo Zoey!"
Zoey: "Stop daydreaming. There was this time when Logan, that jerk was insulting me right? Then Chase suddenly came into the classroom we were in and spilled, 'Don't TOUCH my girlfriend!' That was hilarious!
All three girls laugh.
Robby Ray: "I'll prepare room for Zoey and Ashley to stay in. You girls keep talking."
Miley: "Wow! So that's how you know that he has a crush on you... aw!"
Keely and Miley say at the same time: "So sweet!"
They all laugh.
Miley: "You know my pen pal Ryan? He totally lied to me! He said that he was Ryan in the letters, but he is actually JAKE Ryan. See the big difference?"
Zoey: "Wow... Jake Ryan has a crush on Miley Stewart."
Keely: "Cut it out Zoey! Miley hates Jake now, right?"
Miley nods and hears a knock on the door coming from downstairs.

Chapter 7: You're Bugging Me!
Setting: The Stewarts' House

Miley: "Daddy, who is it?"
Robby Ray: "It's um..."
Jake: "I am Jake. Jake Ryan."
Zoey and Keely rush down the stairs.
Zoey: "OMG! This is Jake Ryan the celebrity! Could I have an autograph?"
Jake: "Um... actually I am here to see Miley."
Keely: "Ooo..."
Miley came down the stairs. She didn't want to see Jake AGAIN but other people were there.
Miley: "Jake? Ok. Zoey, Keely, Daddy could I talk to him alone? Let's go outside Jake."
Jake: "Ok... Look. I am really sorry for being a liar in the letters I sent you. Will you forgive me, Miley?"
Miley: "No way. I don't forgive people like this. Ever. NEVER EVER."
Jake: "Please Miley? Give me a second chance?"
Miley: "You're bugging me Jake! Go! Go home to your LIAR place! Don't ever come back!"
Jake leaves with a sad face. He really liked Miley.

Setting: School

Jake: "Miley, I really wanted to tell you that I am leaving to Romania for 4 months. I will really miss you!"
Miley: "Well I won't Jake! I don't care! I should even talk to you!"
Miley leaves madly. She REALLY isn't happy about being lied to for the last 7 years.
Lilly: "Miley, are you ok? What happened?"
Miley: "It's a long story. I'll tell you later."

Chapter 8: I Don't Know!
Setting: The Stewarts' House

Miley: "You know Lilly, Jake is leaving."
Oliver: "Then you should be happy!"
Lilly: "Yeah. Mr. Celebrity is gone."
Miley: "I know, but I just don't feel right. You know that feeling?"
Oliver: "Nope."
Lilly: "Yeah. I get it. So you like him?"
Miley: "I don't know. Like, I am always mad at him and everything, but I really don't know."
Oliver: "Well where is he going???"
Miley: "Romania. He has to shoot this movie there for 4 months.
Lilly: "Well you'd better find out if you really like him! Remember last time? I missed out on this really cute guy just because of one little lie!!!

~Flashback~

Lilly: "Cody! I don't like you, ok? You have been lying to me for the past 6 months, CHEATING!"
Cody: "I know. I am sorry Lilly, ok? I am so NOT into Ashley! She is just this girl that really understands my feeling inside!"
Lilly: "Well go to missy Ashley Leggat! And STOP bugging me! I am not the kind of girl that would like liars."
Cody: "Well bye-bye Lilly! I have to leave and go back to Canada anyway."
Lilly turns sad right away.

~Flashback Over~

Oliver: "Oh yeah. I remember seeing that sad conversation."
Miley: "Well I really don't know what I should do!"
Lilly: "Tell Jake."
Miley: "No way!"
Oliver: "Well then what are you gonna do?"
Miley: "I don't know..."

Chapter 9: Surprises
Setting: School

Miley cries: "You know what? I really feel weird without Jake, or as we call "Ryan"."
Lilly: "Eek! I never knew that Missy I Hate Jake would actually like him!"
Oliver: "Well yeah. Who ever knew?"
Lilly: "1 minute before school ends!"
Oliver: "Feel happy. Only one minute left." *smiles*
Miley: "Wanna come over after school?"
Lilly: "Sure. We'll be there!"

Setting: The Stewarts' House

Zoey: "Don't you think that no school is fun?"
Keely: "Well yeah. Did you ever like Jake Ryan?"
Zoey: "Oh yeah. But Miley likes her!"
Keely: "Yeah. Don't you feel bad for Miley though?"
Zoey: "Well yeah! Who would wanna be lied to for the last 7 years?"
Miley, Lilly and Oliver finally get to Miley's house. Zoey and Keely hear the key turning.
Zoey: "Hide."
Keely: "Yeah."
Miley comes in the house.
Miley: "Anyone here?"
Zoey and Keely: "Surprise!"
Miley: "Not again!"
Zoey and Keely: "Yeah hey Miley! Hi..." *looks at Lilly and Oliver*
Miley: "Oh yeah. I forgot to introduce! This is Lilly and this is Oliver."
Oliver and Lilly: "Miley, and who are they?"
Zoey: "I am Zoey Brooks. Miley's cousin."
Keely: "I am Keely Brooks. Miley's other cousin."
Zoey and Keely: "And we're TWINS!"
Miley: "They are weird sometimes. If you don't mind, Lilly, Oliver."
Zoey: "What did you just say?"
Keely: "Oh yeah Miley, we have another surprise for you."
Miley: "Really? Could they listen?"
Zoey: "Yeah sure! Ok... here it is! Drum roll..."

Chapter 10: BFFs
Setting: The Stewarts' House

Zoey: "We're moving in! Yay us!"
Miley: "But why guys?"
Keely starts to cry.
Keely: "You know how daddy died 5 years ago, right? Now mommy did too..."
Keely and Zoey cry even harder.
Zoey: "Uncle Robby decided to help us so he called us to come and live here instead."
Lilly: "Wow... then I guess that you should know something... Miley is Ha..."
Miley shuts Lilly's mouth up.
Miley: "Lilly was just trying to say that I am happy that you're here, but I didn't like why."
Oliver: "Yeah. Yeah."
Robby Ray: "Miley, I need you up here for some planning."
Miley rushes upstairs, leaving everyone downstairs.
Miley: "What's up? Daddy?"
Robby Ray: "Do you think that you should tell them the secret?"
Miley: "Yes... but I am really afraid that they would let EVERYONE know... including Amber and Ashley."
Robby Ray: "But you should really trust them."
Miley: "Remember what happened when Lilly knew?"

~Flashback~

Setting: Hannah Montana's Closet

Lilly: "Why don't you tell Amber and Ashley?"
Miley: "Remember what I said?"
Lilly: "Yeah... but you can't be that selfish! I am gonna tell..."
Miley: "No you won't."

~Flashback Over~

Miley: "You understand?"
Robby: "Your choice..."
Miley comes downstairs and found out something...

Chapter 11: What?
Setting: School

Miley: "I can't believe you told that secret to them before I gave you permission."
Lilly: "It was a total mistake! I am sorry Miley!"
Miley: "Sorry for what?"
Lilly: "No! Let me explain!"
Miley: "Explain what?"
Miley stomps away.
Lilly: "Miley! It's not what you think it is!"
Oliver: "Whoa. What happened?"
Amber: "Ooo... I see friendship troubles!"
Ashley: "I can see that the losers are losing again."
Amber and Ashley laugh.
Amber and Ashley: "Ooo... tiss..."
Amber and Ashley laugh once more and walk away.
Keely and Zoey walk up to Lilly and Oliver.
Zoey: "Whoa. What just happened?"
Keely: "And where is Miley?"
Lilly: "Long story. Miley is mad at me for telling her secret, and Amber and Ashley, the 2 school bullies are mean to us."
Oliver: "That's actually a short story."
Lilly: "Whatever."
Keely: "Oh... okay..."
Zoey: "Yeah."
Miley screams and then she starts coughing nonstop because of that.

Chapter 12: Concert Alone
Setting: Hannah Montana Concert

Miley dresses up as Hannah and goes on stage.
Hannah: "I am very sorry tonight. Lola and Smokin' Oken couldn't make it here. Sorry! But I'll sing a few more songs."
The crowd cheers.
Hannah: "Let's start with... The Other Side of Me!"
The crowd cheers louder.
Hannah performs The Other Side of Me really well and the crowd cheers again.
One person from the crowd: "Lola! Smoken' Oken! Lola! Smoken' Oken!"
Hannah: "Sorry again. They're not here."
Suddenly, Lilly and Oliver, dressed as Lola and Smoken' Oken came out from the back stage.
Lola: "Now who said I'm not here?"
Smoken' Oken: "Who said?"
Hannah sang Who Said with Lola and Smoken' Oken. They had a really good time.

Setting: Backstage

Lilly: "I have to go now. Here... I am half way there... 3/4 way there..."
Miley and Lilly: "Hugs?"
Miley and Lilly hug.
Miley: "I am so sorry for treating you like that for the past few days."
Lilly: "It's okay. I totally get it."
Miley and Lilly hug once more.

Chapter 13: Advice
Setting: The Stewarts' House

Miley: "Daddy, I need help."
Robby Ray: "What's up, bud?"
Miley: "Jake Ryan is coming back in a month. I really don't know what I should do!"
Robby Ray: "But don't you like him?"
Miley: "Yes but..."
Robby Ray: "Yeah I get how it feels. You like him, but you don't know how to say it."
Miley: "Yeah."
Miley starts to sob.
Robby Ray: "Everything is gonna be all right, bud."
Miley: "You think so?"
Robby Ray: "Yes I think so."
Miley: "But what do I do when he comes back?"
Robby Ray: "Live, laugh, love."
Miley: "Huh?"
Robby Ray: "Do what you can. Tell him when the time is right."
Miley: "Thanks dad."
Robby Ray: "I am always here for you, bud."
Miley and Robby Ray hug.
Miley sobs once more.

Chapter 14: The Phone Call
Setting: The Stewarts' House

Miley is still sobbing. She is totally hurt. She doesn't know what to do!
Miley hears the phone ring. She tries to stop sobbing.
Miley: "Hello?"
Jake: "Hi Miley. I'll be back soon. I really miss you."
Miley: "For what? Let's review. Shall we? You lied to me..."
Jake cut her off.
Jake: "I know. I am really sorry."
Miley: "You don't deserve forgiveness!"
Jake: "Look. I am really sorry. And I barely say that to people."
Miley: "Yeah yeah. You have said this at least a hundred times. See? You lied."
Jake: "I am really sorry Miley. I didn't mean to lie to you."
Miley: "You totally meant it!"
Jake: "I am really sorry."
Jake cried for his first time.
Miley: "You don't deserve my forgiveness!"
Miley hung up on Jake. She was really sad.
The phone rang again, but Miley didn't pick it up. It's Jake... again.
Miley sat on the floor. She started crying again.

Chapter 15: The Truth Be Gold
Setting: Hannah Montana Concert

Hannah: "Hey guys! How's everyone?"
The crowd cheers.
Hannah: "Well that's a good, right?"
The crowd cheers louder.
Hannah: "Are you excited?"
The crowd screams.
Hannah: "I'm gonna start with my favourite, Best of Both Worlds!"
The crowd screams with a few guys shouting, "Hannah we love you!".
Hannah Montana sings.
Hannah: "How was it?"
The crowd shouts, "Good!".
Hannah: "Well now I am going to sing my other favourite, If We Were A Movie!"
The crowd cheers really loud.
Hannah Montana sings.
Hannah: "Should I play the guitar for you?"
The crowd screams.
Hannah plays the guitar accompanied slow version of If We Were A Movie.
The crowd cheers again.
Hannah: "Actually, I think that you all are dying to know who I really is."
The crowd shouts, "Yes!!!".
Hannah: "Good bye to my secret identity. I am Miley Stewart."
Hannah takes off her wig to show that she is really Miley.
The crowd gasps.
Jake shouts: "Miley Stewart! I am back! I love you!"
The crowd: "Oh my gosh! Jake Ryan likes Miley Stewart!"
Jake Ryan comes up to the stage, and he gets a microphone.
Jake: "Miley, I am really sorry. I came back. Please forgive me!"
Jake kneels down to plead for forgiveness.
Miley: "Jake Ryan, I am through with pretending that I don't like you and the truth is... I am totally in love with you."
Jake and Miley finally french kiss.
Miley suddenly stops Jake and taps her microphone.
Miley: "Wait a minute... is this thing on?"

THE END

cutie_girl
01-08-2007, 03:53 PM
hello? plz comment! i noe this is like the worst one ever... but i wanna know bout wat u think, so i could learn!

cutie_girl
01-08-2007, 03:58 PM
plz anyone?

Jessicastar
01-08-2007, 04:02 PM
It's kool.

miles/hannah788
01-08-2007, 04:04 PM
Itz cool

Lanae_M
01-08-2007, 04:07 PM
good just next time make little longer!

Jessicastar
01-08-2007, 04:07 PM
Yea. No offense, but, it's a little too obvious of a description.

cutie_girl
01-08-2007, 04:41 PM
huh wat do u mean? u mean like its not supposed to b that obvious? ok then ! thx for ur comments! i'll make my ch. 2

cutie_girl
01-08-2007, 04:48 PM
Chapter 2: Pen Pal Miley

Setting: School

Miley freaks out: "What? the pen pal i had for years is... JAKE?"

Lilly: "Oh that's new."

Oliver: "Oh yeah. who knew that Jake likes Miley or even knows her?"

Jake: "Miley, I really liked you since we started writing to each other. <3"

Miley: "I dreamed bout this. Never knew that it would come true, or knew that Jake is my pen pal! Jake, why did you lie to me?"

Jake: "I know! My signature's always Ryan. It was because I didn't want you to write to me like I am Jake Ryan the celebrity. I wanted you to write to me like I am Jake Ryan the person."

Miley: "Well you still lied! *slaps him and stomps away*"

Oliver: "Whoa that was fast!"

Lilly: "Oh yeah. FAST!"

Jake: "No Miley wait up!"

Miley walks into the washroom and cries: "Who knew that my trusted pen pal could lie to me?"

Then Miley heard mean footsteps from outside to the washroom. They were footsteps of Amber and Ashley.

cutie_girl
01-08-2007, 04:49 PM
any comments?

Lanae_M
01-08-2007, 07:05 PM
Keep going!!!

Baby Vanessa
01-08-2007, 07:46 PM
it's good

YouKnowYouLoveMe
01-08-2007, 09:10 PM
its good!

Just make the chapters alittle longer!

flower1
01-08-2007, 09:46 PM
Yuck!(baaarrrffff!!!!)

cutie_girl
01-08-2007, 10:03 PM
ok gotcha! i'll keep going...

cutie_girl
01-08-2007, 10:09 PM
Chapter 3: When They Attack

Setting: School

Miley: "Amber? Ashley?"

Amber: "I heard that Jake Ryan likes you!"

Ashley: "Yeah! Like, we're into Jake Ryan so we..."

Miley: "I noe wat u guys mean. Wanna beat me up eh?"

Amber: "No! We just wanna keep you from Jake."

Miley goes outta the washroom: "Well, c u guys later!"

Ashley: "Smile for the camara!" *takes picture of Miley scared*

Miley: "Oliver, Lilly, you totally dunno wat just happened."

Lilly: "You got beat up by Amber and Ashley?"

Oliver: "If she did, she wouldn't be alive right now."

Lilly laughs: "Yeah rite."

Oliver: "Actually, I am kinda jealous of Jake Ryan."

Miley: "Yeah?"

Lilly: "Seems like it!"

Oliver: "The bell's ringing. Let's go to class!"

Then Miley felt a tap on her shoulder. It was Jake... again.

cutie_girl
01-08-2007, 10:10 PM
any comments guys???? :D tell me wat i did wrong so i learn from them!

Fire-Chicken
01-09-2007, 10:08 AM
I like it!!

*futurepopstar*
01-09-2007, 04:27 PM
It's okay. Constructive criticism coming your way!

longer chapters would make it better, and add descriptions so it's a little more real. And I recommend using "___" for dialogue instead of like a script, unless that's how you were trying to do it. Good job otherwise!

Lanae_M
01-09-2007, 05:03 PM
Good job but I agree with *Futurepopstar*

cutie_girl
01-09-2007, 05:32 PM
ya thx guys! i'll try to make them longer... its just i keep on writin junk lol

cutie_girl
01-09-2007, 05:53 PM
Chapter 4: Letters, Letters, Letters

Setting: Miley's House

Miley opens her boxes of letters from Jake Ryan. She started reading some of them.

Dear Miley,

Hello! I am Ryan. It was nice to know that there's a girl out there that likes Zombie High. I like that a lot too~
In your letter, you said that you like the popstar Hannah Montana. Same with me. She really is hot and everything, but I bet that you are hotter <3
I like to watch TV and play on the computer. I was ALWAYS bugged by my friends because they always flip through the letter you sent to me last month. I hope you have a good New Year!

Your pen pal,
Ryan

Dear Miley,

Wow! I never knew that you loved to dance! Hannah Montana dances soooo well that I couldn't keep up with the dance moves. Could you?
Sleeping is one of my hobbies. I know that you enjoy sleeping too! Do you? Tell me in your next letter. And I hope that we'll be able to share deep secrets soon!

Your pen pal,
Ryan

Dear Miley,

I have a big confession to make. Even though we haven't met face to face, or talked face to face, I have a strange feeling about you. When I told my friends this feeling, they say that I must love you. Do I?
Let's jump to another topic. Well last night, my older brother fell right off his bunk! It was hilarious when he started laughing later with a bruised neck!

Your pen pal,
Ryan

Lilly: "Aw... that last letter was so sweet! You're so lucky that Jake's into you!"

Miley: "You know what? I am gonna throw those out! Jake is a LIAR!" *throws out every single letter in every box*

Lilly: "Ouch! You know that Jake must really like you!"

Miley: "Well you think so? How about you go and date Jake!"

Lilly: "I would wanna, but I know you really like Jake inside! Aw..."

Miley: "Whatever you say!"

Lilly: "Then how about you go talk to him?"

Miley: "No way! I am NOT going to talk to that big liar!"

Lilly: "Whatever you wanna do, Miley."

Robby Ray: "You girls are gonna sleepover?"

Miley: "Are you staying?"

Setting: School Next Day

Jake: "Miley, you know that I really like you."

Miley: "Well, Jake, you're a LIAR!"

The bell is ringing and they all go to class. Jake is following Miley.

Katybug1994
01-09-2007, 06:11 PM
It's good, but not really good!! You need to make it seem like more of what Miley and Lilly would say. You know what I mean? Well, I hope you do.

cutie_girl
01-09-2007, 07:10 PM
yeah... i noe ch 3 is kinda bad... still workin on that lol

JC4everGirl
01-09-2007, 07:17 PM
actually its really good but have some of the other characters speak more lines!! :)

cutie_girl
01-09-2007, 07:18 PM
yeah... i need imagination lol thx for ur comments guys <3 i couldnt have done this wifout u! :D

Katybug1994
01-09-2007, 07:43 PM
Yea.. if you need examples just check other fanfictions to help you with yours. Or check mine out. It's Frist Day of Highschool. Just suggesting.

cutie_girl
01-09-2007, 07:45 PM
yeah thx

Katybug1994
01-09-2007, 07:46 PM
Your welcome, keep tryin' to improve it. But your doin' pretty good for a begginer.

cutie_girl
01-09-2007, 07:52 PM
thx. this is supposed to b a birthday surprise for my friend Cass. she'd b really surprised when she noes that i started writin fan fictions for her. so this is my first one. lol

Katybug1994
01-09-2007, 08:00 PM
That's cool! It's fun to write little fanfictions of Hannah Montana.

numba1puppyluva
01-09-2007, 08:00 PM
Doesn't really seem what Miley would say, it kinda makes her sound, you know, superficial ya know?

cyrusfan55
01-09-2007, 09:42 PM
its good, just make it more detailed and it will be even better. also i think you should write it more as a story then a script.

cutie_girl
01-11-2007, 08:23 PM
ok thx for ur comments! i'll post the next chapter soon

Baby Vanessa
01-11-2007, 08:24 PM
yay i agree^^^^ but it's good ralphie i luv it

mileyroxx
01-12-2007, 02:18 PM
It's nice.

cutie_girl
01-12-2007, 05:24 PM
yay i agree^^^^ but it's good ralphie i luv it
thx everyone! i'll work on the next chapter, ch 5 asap! and baby vanessa, I am Raphie. NOT Ralphie btw. lol

cutie_girl
01-12-2007, 05:59 PM
ok... i'll do ch 5 after piano time lol and cutie137 ur here!

cutie_girl
01-12-2007, 07:20 PM
Chapter 5: Broken Dreams

Setting: School

Miley turns around: "What?"

Jake: "I just wanna know where room 137 is."

Miley *mad*: "End of the hallway. BYE!"

Jake thinks: "Whoa! Geez Miley! I know that it's my fault, but you don't have to be that mad! I guess liking Miley isn't such a good idea... but I do still like the old her. The Pen Pal her."

Miley meets up with Lilly: "I really can't wait 'til the weekend! It's in 45 minutes!!!"

Lilly: "Oh yeah!"

Oliver: "At least we could get away from Mr. Celebrity!"

Miley smiles: "You guys ROCK!"

Setting: The Stewarts' House

Miley walks into her home: "Daddy? Jackson?"

No one answered.

Miley is scared: "Hello?"

No one answered.

Miley walks into her room and sees a dark shadow in the corner.

Miley screams: "Who, who, who are you?"

SmileyMiley11
01-12-2007, 07:21 PM
I love it

cutie_girl
01-12-2007, 07:21 PM
wowwy thx! anything you dun get?

cyrusfan55
01-12-2007, 07:36 PM
omg whats gonna happen!??!?!

cutie_girl
01-12-2007, 08:20 PM
u'll c... when i get more comments!

alyson83
01-12-2007, 09:01 PM
come on i need to here what happens next!
Keep up the good work.
{ off topic but i love your siggy "cutie girl" }

cutie_girl
01-12-2007, 09:26 PM
yea thx. i got it off google lol

Lanae_M
01-12-2007, 09:34 PM
I want to no what happens next! I love your story!!!

cutie_girl
01-12-2007, 10:17 PM
ok! i'll post ch 6. like, i'll do that now lol since u guys like it! ♥

cutie_girl
01-12-2007, 10:28 PM
Chapter 6: Keely and Zoey Brooks

Setting: The Stewarts' House

Keely, Zoey and Robbie Ray yell: "Surprise!"

Miley: "OMG! My fave cousins are here! Daddy, I thought that you were kidnapped or something! Wait... Dadnapped!"

They all laugh.

Miley: "So Keely, Zoey, when did you guys get here?"

Zoey: "Today!"

Keely: "Yup! Today! It was painful flying from Toronto to here!"

Robby Ray: "Well glad that you're here girls! I was shocked when I saw them at the door."

They all laugh again.

Miley: "Yay! Group hug!"

All three girls hug.

Miley: "How's PCA?"

Zoey: "VERY good. Remember that Chase I told you about?"

Miley: "Ya, that guy that has a crush on you?"

Keely: "Ooo Zoey!"

Zoey: "Stop daydreaming. There was this time when Logan, that jerk was insulting me right? Then Chase suddenly came into the classroom we were in and spilled, 'Don't TOUCH my girlfriend!' That was hilarious!

All three girls laugh.

Robby Ray: "I'll prepare room for Zoey and Ashley to stay in. You girls keep talking."

Miley: "Wow! So that's how you know that he has a crush on you... aw!"

Keely and Miley say at the same time: "So sweet!"

They all laugh.

Miley: "You know my pen pal Ryan? He totally lied to me! He said that he was Ryan in the letters, but he is actually JAKE Ryan. See the big difference?"

Zoey: "Wow... Jake Ryan has a crush on Miley Stewart."

Keely: "Cut it out Zoey! Miley hates Jake now, right?"

Miley nods and hears a knock on the door coming from downstairs.

SmileyMiley11
01-12-2007, 10:31 PM
OMG this is so awesome!

cutie_girl
01-12-2007, 10:36 PM
wow thx! i just wrote it like a mystery ending in ch 5 so i have to get a happy part to it lol

SmileyMiley11
01-12-2007, 10:36 PM
yeah!

YouKnowYouLoveMe
01-12-2007, 10:36 PM
:o Great Job!

Now im distracted from writing mine! So you HAVE to post more

cutie_girl
01-12-2007, 10:38 PM
*big laugh* wow thx! i really like to write mystery stories! i hope i'll getta post some HM mysteries here! lol and i wanna get people hooked so i wont post more til tommorrow! lol

it wont b fun if i give it out rite away! lol

YouKnowYouLoveMe
01-12-2007, 10:44 PM
sheesh make me wait!

lol ok :D I have to work on mine now.

cutie_girl
01-12-2007, 10:46 PM
ok i m like totally hooked to urs. i'll write more tom.

cutie_girl
01-12-2007, 10:52 PM
♥ i luv that fan fiction by allison btw ♥

cutie_girl
01-12-2007, 11:10 PM
ok... i was thinkin... it's not fun not having people postin on here anymore... so the waiting is done, and the writing begins!

mileycyrusfan1
01-12-2007, 11:17 PM
I love it! ♥

cutie_girl
01-12-2007, 11:19 PM
Chapter 7: You're Bugging Me!

Setting: The Stewarts' House

Miley: "Daddy, who is it?"

Robby Ray: "It's um..."

Jake: "I am Jake. Jake Ryan."

Zoey and Keely rush down the stairs.

Zoey: "OMG! This is Jake Ryan the celebrity! Could I have an autograph?"

Jake: "Um... actually I am here to see Miley."

Keely: "Ooo..."

Miley came down the stairs. She didn't want to see Jake AGAIN but other people were there.

Miley: "Jake? Ok. Zoey, Keely, Daddy could I talk to him alone? Let's go outside Jake."

Jake: "Ok... Look. I am really sorry for being a liar in the letters I sent you. Will you forgive me, Miley?"

Miley: "No way. I don't forgive people like this. Ever. NEVER EVER."

Jake: "Please Miley? Give me a second chance?"

Miley: "You're bugging me Jake! Go! Go home to your LIAR place! Don't ever come back!"

Jake leaves with a sad face. He really liked Miley.

Setting: School

Jake: "Miley, I really wanted to tell you that I am leaving to Romania for 4 months. I will really miss you!"

Miley: "Well I won't Jake! I don't care! I should even talk to you!"

Miley leaves madly. She REALLY isn't happy about being lied to for the last 7 years.

Lilly: "Miley, are you ok? What happened?"

Miley: "It's a long story. I'll tell you later."

YouKnowYouLoveMe
01-12-2007, 11:22 PM
:o Good!!!!

cutie_girl
01-12-2007, 11:23 PM
thx!

mileyjake_10
01-12-2007, 11:40 PM
more! ♥ ü ♥

Fire-Chicken
01-13-2007, 05:05 AM
More!!!!!!

cutie_girl
01-14-2007, 03:49 PM
ok... i'll rite more.

cutie_girl
01-14-2007, 03:59 PM
Chapter 8: I Don't Know!

Setting: The Stewarts' House

Miley: "You know Lilly, Jake is leaving."

Oliver: "Then you should be happy!"

Lilly: "Yeah. Mr. Celebrity is gone."

Miley: "I know, but I just don't feel right. You know that feeling?"

Oliver: "Nope."

Lilly: "Yeah. I get it. So you like him?"

Miley: "I don't know. Like, I am always mad at him and everything, but I really don't know."

Oliver: "Well where is he going???"

Miley: "Romania. He has to shoot this movie there for 4 months.

Lilly: "Well you'd better find out if you really like him! Remember last time? I missed out on this really cute guy just because of one little lie!!!

~Flashback~

Lilly: "Cody! I don't like you, ok? You have been lying to me for the past 6 months, CHEATING!"

Cody: "I know. I am sorry Lilly, ok? I am so NOT into Ashley! She is just this girl that really understands my feeling inside!"

Lilly: "Well go to missy Ashley Leggat! And STOP bugging me! I am not the kind of girl that would like liars."

Cody: "Well bye-bye Lilly! I have to leave and go back to Canada anyway."

Lilly turns sad right away.

~Flashback Over~

Oliver: "Oh yeah. I remember seeing that sad conversation."

Miley: "Well I really don't know what I should do!"

Lilly: "Tell Jake."

Miley: "No way!"

Oliver: "Well then what are you gonna do?"

Miley: "I don't know..."

ok... so how was that?

cutie_girl
01-14-2007, 09:14 PM
anyone? comments plz

cutie_girl
01-14-2007, 09:22 PM
anyone? *cry*!!! :'( :'( :'( :'( :'( :'(

cutie_girl
01-14-2007, 09:28 PM
P L Z

Baby Vanessa
01-14-2007, 09:35 PM
really good ralphie

Fire-Chicken
01-15-2007, 09:39 AM
Really Good!! More!!

hannah_montana.boston
01-15-2007, 12:44 PM
need mor want mor hungry 4 mor

sar522
01-15-2007, 01:57 PM
that was really good
still put a little more detail

cutie_girl
01-15-2007, 07:25 PM
o ok thx!

Baby Vanessa
01-15-2007, 07:27 PM
more plz *does puupdog face*

cutie_girl
01-15-2007, 07:28 PM
aw... i m kinda busy rite now... sry! i have to brainstorm... i totally got the ending already. just have to connect.

hannah_montana.boston
01-15-2007, 08:17 PM
*crying*i*hiccup*wa-wa-want*hiccup*m-m-more*hiccup*

cutie_girl
01-17-2007, 08:57 PM
*laughs* nice! i really like this but i just dun have time this week. i'll post asap

Lanae_M
01-17-2007, 10:17 PM
Ok doeky!

hannah_montana.boston
01-18-2007, 04:43 PM
alrighty

Baby Vanessa
01-18-2007, 04:44 PM
yay i can't wait it is going to be lovely*laughs *

cutie_girl
01-19-2007, 05:42 PM
yea i m back! i'll do more rite now.

cutie_girl
01-19-2007, 05:56 PM
Chapter 9: Surprises

Setting: School

Miley cries: "You know what? I really feel weird without Jake, or as we call "Ryan"."

Lilly: "Eek! I never knew that Missy I Hate Jake would actually like him!"

Oliver: "Well yeah. Who ever knew?"

Lilly: "1 minute before school ends!"

Oliver: "Feel happy. Only one minute left." *smiles*

Miley: "Wanna come over after school?"

Lilly: "Sure. We'll be there!"

Setting: The Stewarts' House

Zoey: "Don't you think that no school is fun?"

Keely: "Well yeah. Did you ever like Jake Ryan?"

Zoey: "Oh yeah. But Miley likes her!"

Keely: "Yeah. Don't you feel bad for Miley though?"

Zoey: "Well yeah! Who would wanna be lied to for the last 7 years?"

Miley, Lilly and Oliver finally get to Miley's house. Zoey and Keely hear the key turning.

Zoey: "Hide."

Keely: "Yeah."

Miley comes in the house.

Miley: "Anyone here?"

Zoey and Keely: "Surprise!"

Miley: "Not again!"

Zoey and Keely: "Yeah hey Miley! Hi..." *looks at Lilly and Oliver*

Miley: "Oh yeah. I forgot to introduce! This is Lilly and this is Oliver."

Oliver and Lilly: "Miley, and who are they?"

Zoey: "I am Zoey Brooks. Miley's cousin."

Keely: "I am Keely Brooks. Miley's other cousin."

Zoey and Keely: "And we're TWINS!"

Miley: "They are weird sometimes. If you don't mind, Lilly, Oliver."

Zoey: "What did you just say?"

Keely: "Oh yeah Miley, we have another surprise for you."

Miley: "Really? Could they listen?"

Zoey: "Yeah sure! Ok... here it is! Drum roll..."

ok... and here is the end of it! You like it?

L.A.
01-20-2007, 10:04 PM
Thats really good!!

Baby Vanessa
01-20-2007, 10:05 PM
More plz ralphie pretty pretty plz

Katybug1994
01-20-2007, 11:04 PM
That's good!!

AllisonTame
01-21-2007, 07:34 AM
more more more!!!

hannah_montana.boston
01-21-2007, 02:49 PM
nice very nice

MileyRox1174
01-21-2007, 03:01 PM
more please!! It's good!!

cutie_girl
01-21-2007, 08:18 PM
ok thx guys! i'll post more once more people comment... and make u wait! lol

Baby Vanessa
01-21-2007, 08:19 PM
no plz moree

cutie_girl
01-21-2007, 08:25 PM
ok... i'll work on it while eating dinner... like now lol

cutie_girl
01-21-2007, 08:39 PM
Chapter 10: BFFs

Setting: The Stewarts' House

Zoey: "We're moving in! Yay us!"

Miley: "But why guys?"

Ashley starts to cry.

Ashley: "You know how daddy died 5 years ago, right? Now mommy did too..."

Ashley and Zoey cry even harder.

Zoey: "Uncle Robby decided to help us so he called us to come and live here instead."

Lilly: "Wow... then I guess that you should know something... Miley is Ha..."

Miley shuts Lilly's mouth up.

Miley: "Lilly was just trying to say that I am happy that you're here, but I didn't like why."

Oliver: "Yeah. Yeah."

Robby Ray: "Miley, I need you up here for some planning."

Miley rushes upstairs, leaving everyone downstairs.

Miley: "What's up? Daddy?"

Robby Ray: "Do you think that you should tell them the secret?"

Miley: "Yes... but I am really afraid that they would let EVERYONE know... including Amber and Ashley."

Robby Ray: "But you should really trust them."

Miley: "Remember what happened when Lilly knew?"

~Flashback~

Setting: Hannah Montana's Closet

Lilly: "Why don't you tell Amber and Ashley?"

Miley: "Remember what I said?"

Lilly: "Yeah... but you can't be that selfish! I am gonna tell..."

Miley: "No you won't."

~Flashback Over~

Miley: "You understand?"

Robby: "Your choice..."

Miley comes downstairs and found out something...

L.A.
01-21-2007, 10:35 PM
That Is So Good!!

Fire-Chicken
01-22-2007, 09:50 AM
U Need To Write More!!

Sporty Miley
01-22-2007, 11:28 AM
wow this is really good!!!!!!!!!!!! plzzzzzzzzz rite more!!!!

MileyRox1174
01-22-2007, 08:54 PM
Omg Please Write More!! It's Really Good!!

Sporty Miley
01-23-2007, 04:30 PM
i love zoey 101 and hannah montana, so i LOVE this!!!!!!!!!!

cutie_girl
01-23-2007, 07:53 PM
u really like it?
i'll post more l8r

Baby Vanessa
01-23-2007, 07:56 PM
yes more plz

cutie_girl
01-23-2007, 07:58 PM
yea l8r... or mayb now lol

hannah_montana.boston
01-23-2007, 08:15 PM
now would b good
what happened next?????????????

MileyRox1174
01-24-2007, 04:24 PM
More!! Pleeeeeeeez!!!

L.A.
01-24-2007, 07:38 PM
More!!!

Please!!!

~Miley~Rox~
01-24-2007, 08:12 PM
wow thwt was sooooooooo greatttt!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Sporty Miley
01-25-2007, 10:52 AM
MORE plzzzzzzzzz!!!!!

cutie_girl
01-26-2007, 07:54 PM
ok... to prevent the confusion, Ashley Brooks would be named Keely Brooks instead. I have changed the names from the chapters before... and it would be easier...

Chapter 11: What?

Setting: School

Miley: "I can't believe you told that secret to them before I gave you permission."

Lilly: "It was a total mistake! I am sorry Miley!"

Miley: "Sorry for what?"

Lilly: "No! Let me explain!"

Miley: "Explain what?"

Miley stomps away.

Lilly: "Miley! It's not what you think it is!"

Oliver: "Whoa. What happened?"

Amber: "Ooo... I see friendship troubles!"

Ashley: "I can see that the losers are losing again."

Amber and Ashley laugh.

Amber and Ashley: "Ooo... tiss..."

Amber and Ashley laugh once more and walk away.

Keely and Zoey walk up to Lilly and Oliver.

Zoey: "Whoa. What just happened?"

Keely: "And where is Miley?"

Lilly: "Long story. Miley is mad at me for telling her secret, and Amber and Ashley, the 2 school bullies are mean to us."

Oliver: "That's actually a short story."

Lilly: "Whatever."

Keely: "Oh... okay..."

Zoey: "Yeah."

Miley screams and then she starts coughing nonstop because of that.

Baby Vanessa
01-26-2007, 08:01 PM
good more plz

cutie_girl
01-26-2007, 08:05 PM
not now... *makes funny face*

cutie_girl
01-26-2007, 09:59 PM
more comments?

cutie_girl
01-26-2007, 10:19 PM
comments? plz

MileyRox1174
01-27-2007, 03:29 PM
Love It!! More Please!!

Sporty Miley
01-27-2007, 07:04 PM
i LOVE it!!!!!! MORE!!!!!!!!!!!

cutie_girl
01-27-2007, 07:39 PM
i'll post more tom. more comments?

cutie_girl
01-28-2007, 03:06 PM
more comments?

Sporty Miley
01-29-2007, 02:01 PM
plzzzz post more rite away!!!!!!! i can't take it!!!

MileyRox1174
01-29-2007, 07:02 PM
^^Me neither!!

Sporty Miley
01-29-2007, 07:18 PM
lol!!! that's 2 people that can't take it!!! so rite more!!!!!

cutie_girl
01-30-2007, 07:42 PM
ok... i'll rite more asap

cutie_girl
01-30-2007, 08:31 PM
Chapter 12: Concert Alone

Setting: Hannah Montana Concert

Miley dresses up as Hannah and goes on stage.

Hannah: "I am very sorry tonight. Lola and Smokin' Oken couldn't make it here. Sorry! But I'll sing a few more songs."

The crowd cheers.

Hannah: "Let's start with... The Other Side of Me!"

The crowd cheers louder.

Hannah performs The Other Side of Me really well and the crowd cheers again.

One person from the crowd: "Lola! Smoken' Oken! Lola! Smoken' Oken!"

Hannah: "Sorry again. They're not here."

Suddenly, Lilly and Oliver, dressed as Lola and Smoken' Oken came out from the back stage.

Lola: "Now who said I'm not here?"

Smoken' Oken: "Who said?"

Hannah sang Who Said with Lola and Smoken' Oken. They had a really good time.

Setting: Backstage

Lilly: "I have to go now. Here... I am half way there... 3/4 way there..."

Miley and Lilly: "Hugs?"

Miley and Lilly hug.

Miley: "I am so sorry for treating you like that for the past few days."

Lilly: "It's okay. I totally get it."

Miley and Lilly hug once more.

cutie_girl
01-30-2007, 08:45 PM
any comments?

Sporty Miley
01-30-2007, 08:48 PM
AWESOME!!!!!! more!!!!!

cutie_girl
01-30-2007, 08:53 PM
do u think that 15 chapters is enuf?

cutie_girl
01-31-2007, 08:22 PM
any comments?

cutie_girl
01-31-2007, 09:22 PM
plz comment

Fire-Chicken
02-01-2007, 12:16 PM
Plzz Write More! It's Awesome!!

MileyRox1174
02-01-2007, 04:57 PM
do u think that 15 chapters is enuf?



15?! Mine has 43 so far!! Lolz!! Please oh please more!! MORE!! PLEASE!!

Sporty Miley
02-01-2007, 06:05 PM
yeah more!!!!!!!!

sar522
02-01-2007, 06:09 PM
it was ok add more

cutie_girl
02-01-2007, 10:45 PM
:D i'll add more later

cutie_girl
02-02-2007, 10:33 AM
Chapter 13: Advice

Setting: The Stewarts' House

Miley: "Daddy, I need help."

Robby Ray: "What's up, bud?"

Miley: "Jake Ryan is coming back in a month. I really don't know what I should do!"

Robby Ray: "But don't you like him?"

Miley: "Yes but..."

Robby Ray: "Yeah I get how it feels. You like him, but you don't know how to say it."

Miley: "Yeah."

Miley starts to sob.

Robby Ray: "Everything is gonna be all right, bud."

Miley: "You think so?"

Robby Ray: "Yes I think so."

Miley: "But what do I do when he comes back?"

Robby Ray: "Live, laugh, love."

Miley: "Huh?"

Robby Ray: "Do what you can. Tell him when the time is right."

Miley: "Thanks dad."

Robby Ray: "I am always here for you, bud."

Miley and Robby Ray hug.

Miley sobs once more.

SmileyMiley11
02-02-2007, 10:49 AM
cool more more more!!!

cutie_girl
02-02-2007, 11:19 AM
sh... i m only 2 chapters away from the ending so i'll keep people waiting lol

Fire-Chicken
02-02-2007, 01:08 PM
Your Evil! lol, Just Kidding :D

cutie_girl
02-02-2007, 01:12 PM
lol i noe. i m super evil rite? well i already noe what to put in chapter 14 and 15. and then 15 is the end

Fire-Chicken
02-02-2007, 01:15 PM
ur super evil if u don't write it now :P Plzz

cutie_girl
02-02-2007, 01:23 PM
ok... i'll work on it

Fire-Chicken
02-02-2007, 01:26 PM
Thanks!! *Happy Dance* Lol

cutie_girl
02-02-2007, 01:29 PM
lol

cutie_girl
02-02-2007, 01:35 PM
Chapter 14: The Phone Call

Setting: The Stewarts' House

Miley is still sobbing. She is totally hurt. She doesn't know what to do!

Miley hears the phone ring. She tries to stop sobbing.

Miley: "Hello?"

Jake: "Hi Miley. I'll be back soon. I really miss you."

Miley: "For what? Let's review. Shall we? You lied to me..."

Jake cut her off.

Jake: "I know. I am really sorry."

Miley: "You don't deserve forgiveness!"

Jake: "Look. I am really sorry. And I barely say that to people."

Miley: "Yeah yeah. You have said this at least a hundred times. See? You lied."

Jake: "I am really sorry Miley. I didn't mean to lie to you."

Miley: "You totally meant it!"

Jake: "I am really sorry."

Jake cried for his first time.

Miley: "You don't deserve my forgiveness!"

Miley hung up on Jake. She was really sad.

The phone rang again, but Miley didn't pick it up. It's Jake... again.

Miley sat on the floor. She started crying again.

Fire-Chicken
02-02-2007, 01:37 PM
Awesome!!

cutie_girl
02-02-2007, 01:54 PM
:D i noe. lol

cutie_girl
02-02-2007, 02:12 PM
plz comment

MileyRox1174
02-02-2007, 04:33 PM
MORE!! I DON'T WANT IT TO END!! Nooo!! PLEASE MORE THOUGH!!!

cutie_girl
02-02-2007, 04:47 PM
it'll have to end or i'll start writing bad stuff! when it ends i'll make another fan fic

MileyRox1174
02-03-2007, 08:39 AM
Fine! Than please post it already!!

cutie_girl
02-03-2007, 08:41 AM
plz more comments... and after im done chapter 15 i'll post the full version for everyone that didn't see. i'll post it at the first post.

xo_hannah_fan1_xo
02-03-2007, 09:20 AM
Where's the end??

cutie_girl
02-03-2007, 09:25 AM
still working on it... the end is chapter 15 but i haven't posted yet

HannahMontanaX3
02-03-2007, 09:55 AM
post the end now. PLEASE?

vivi loca
02-03-2007, 09:55 AM
more please its really good

cutie_girl
02-03-2007, 09:59 AM
ok... i'll post rite now and then i have to go.

MileyRox1174
02-03-2007, 03:40 PM
Now!! Now!! Please!!

Miley98
02-03-2007, 06:57 PM
come on! I just read the whole thing. But I thought that Miley would say "I'm sry" and they would be friends again. I mean, why is she mad?

HannahMontanaX3
02-03-2007, 07:04 PM
please continue

cutie_girl
02-04-2007, 05:19 PM
ok i'll work on it.

cutie_girl
02-04-2007, 05:28 PM
Chapter 15: The Truth Be Gold

Setting: Hannah Montana Concert

Hannah: "Hey guys! How's everyone?"

The crowd cheers.

Hannah: "Well that's a good, right?"

The crowd cheers louder.

Hannah: "Are you excited?"

The crowd screams.

Hannah: "I'm gonna start with my favourite, Best of Both Worlds!"

The crowd screams with a few guys shouting, "Hannah we love you!".

Hannah Montana sings.

Hannah: "How was it?"

The crowd shouts, "Good!".

Hannah: "Well now I am going to sing my other favourite, If We Were A Movie!"

The crowd cheers really loud.

Hannah Montana sings.

Hannah: "Should I play the guitar for you?"

The crowd screams.

Hannah plays the guitar accompanied slow version of If We Were A Movie.

The crowd cheers again.

Hannah: "Actually, I think that you all are dying to know who I really is."

The crowd shouts, "Yes!!!".

Hannah: "Good bye to my secret identity. I am Miley Stewart."

Hannah takes off her wig to show that she is really Miley.

The crowd gasps.

Jake shouts: "Miley Stewart! I am back! I love you!"

The crowd: "Oh my gosh! Jake Ryan likes Miley Stewart!"

Jake Ryan comes up to the stage, and he gets a microphone.

Jake: "Miley, I am really sorry. I came back. Please forgive me!"

Jake kneels down to plead for forgiveness.

Miley: "Jake Ryan, I am through with pretending that I don't like you and the truth is... I am totally in love with you."

Jake and Miley finally french kiss.

Miley suddenly stops Jake and taps her microphone.

Miley: "Wait a minute... is this thing on?"

THE END

vivi loca
02-04-2007, 05:58 PM
it was awesome you should make another one.

cutie_girl
02-05-2007, 03:47 PM
yea i will soon. plz comment

Baby Miley
02-05-2007, 03:49 PM
whoa. this rocks!!!

MileyRox1174
02-05-2007, 07:38 PM
Lolz FRENCH KISS?! Lolz that was REALLY good! You should make another one!

cutie_girl
02-05-2007, 07:41 PM
yea i will. i had to make a romantic part to the ending. aw... lol

Fire-Chicken
02-06-2007, 01:09 PM
A funny a great ending!! Hope u write another soon :D

MileyRox1174
02-06-2007, 07:20 PM
If you write another one, PM me the link please!

cutie_girl
02-06-2007, 07:51 PM
kk!!! i will

cutie_girl
02-09-2007, 09:15 PM
comments plz

cutie_girl
02-11-2007, 07:59 PM
anymore comments?

Sporty Miley
02-18-2007, 04:32 PM
AHHHHHHHHHHH!!!! i LOVED it!!!!!!!!!!! u have 2 rite another 1!!!!!!!!

cutie_girl
02-18-2007, 06:02 PM
ya i did in fact! read All's Fair in Love, War and High School (sequel of Fan Fiction by cutie_girl)

Sporty Miley
02-19-2007, 08:40 AM
^AWESOME!!!! ill check it out!!!

hotalyssa09
02-19-2007, 02:17 PM
that was cool

cutie_girl
02-19-2007, 08:29 PM
thx!!!

cutie_girl
03-16-2007, 08:36 AM
plz~ more comments

cutie_girl
03-17-2007, 08:07 AM
the special edition is up on first post! read for reference so that u dun have to FIND the posts!

cutie_girl
04-16-2007, 08:16 PM
more comments????? plzplzplz?

jasondolleylover1
04-25-2007, 04:25 PM
wow!!! that'z really good!!!!

cutie_girl
04-25-2007, 06:38 PM
thanks. u should read the sequel to it. it's called All's Fair in Love, War and High School (sequel to fan fiction by cutie_girl) and it already has an ending and i m working on my newest one, Hidden Secrets (fan fiction)